Constructive criticism

cardinalskate

cardinalskate

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I don't know if people do this around here, but I'm desperate to learn and I thought who better to ask than all you amazing peeps here at SSD. I have to admit that I am WAY more comfortable scrapping with a template, as I doubt my creativity when I'm doing a LO all myself. So how 'bout telling me what I could do to improve this...

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I swear I can take it...(I hope :p). Lemme have it!
 
Maybe a red paper layer at an angle above the print but below the torn edge one.

Looks good so far.
I struggle with this myself, I am not an expert in the least!
 
I agree with a solid paper layer. I think you have good balance and clustering though. I can't believe that you are just beginning! My beginning pages are an embarrassment compared to this one. :)
 
I think I would do an actual paper instead of brushes. That looks fine but I think I would do the paper. Put it at the same or slightly off angle of your torn paper.
 
Thanks Tara. I wouldn't say I'm just starting out, but I'm looking to improve! And believe me, my first LOs WERE an embarrassment, fo sho. Shadows?? What are those?? :)
 
Since your frames are basically white I would change the white paper for red and then put a white layer under it.
 
Red paper (not brush)

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Red on top (this ABSOLUTELY makes the frames pop better)

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Red on top with creamy underneath:

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I so appreciate all the comments and help. My clustering is actually what I was most worried about LOL
 
I like the switch of the papers....red on top and cream under it. But now the strawberries and red embellies are lost in the red. Add some cream or other color elements under them maybe?

I also like the cream on top with the red underneath.
 
I think the strawberries still pop, but maybe do a cream brush under them? I also think the pop out circles should be the paisley paper, it was more of a pop.
 
I have a couple of suggestions. :)

I'd move the photo cluster block to the right side of the page. This way her gaze in the photo will draw the viewers eye into the page rather than off it like it does now. I'd also flip the white angled paper and the circle cutouts so they are to the left of the photo cluster for the same reason - so the gaze in the main photo draws your eye toward them rather than away from them.

I'd also get rid of the awkward white space above the bottom photo. Either by angling the bottom photo a bit less so it balances the top photo better or by clustering over that space a bit more. Your clustered elements look really good otherwise!
 
Wow Lynette, this is exactly what I was hoping for...a suggestion that I never would have thought of in a million years. The way my DD is looking/facing in a LO can effect how the viewer draws their eye across the page. So simple and yet I never would have thought about it!

I'm appreciating everyone's suggestions so much!
 
Lynnette suggested what I was going to suggest, but I would also add a few embellies on the other side of the cluster to make it a tad more balanced. Maybe even a paper ring on the top left and a smaller duplicate one on the bottom right to echo it.
 
Lynnette and Traci added most of what I would have, the only thing I have left to suggest is that I would work on your shadows, it looks like you have the same settings on all of them on your cluster, plus they are really dark.
 
Traci, loved that suggestion. I love the circle at the bottom, but was iffy about the top one. Anyway...

This is the final product. I love how it turned out. I decided I was done before I got the suggestion from Trish to look at my shadows, and that is my main stuggle, so I'll be working on those in future LOs, though they aren't all the same in this LO. I use Peppermint and Jen's shadows and always tweak them, though I didn't tweak much on this one. For now, I've gotta be done with this one because it's taken me all morning LOL.

 
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Nettio said:
I have a couple of suggestions. :)

I'd move the photo cluster block to the right side of the page. This way her gaze in the photo will draw the viewers eye into the page rather than off it like it does now. I'd also flip the white angled paper and the circle cutouts so they are to the left of the photo cluster for the same reason - so the gaze in the main photo draws your eye toward them rather than away from them.

I'd also get rid of the awkward white space above the bottom photo. Either by angling the bottom photo a bit less so it balances the top photo better or by clustering over that space a bit more. Your clustered elements look really good otherwise!
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This was my thought exactly.

A lot of times, I'll start with a template and then add and remove as necessary to make it my own. That helped me learn a lot of the technique without getting TOO far out of my comfort zone ;)

You are a FANTASTIC scrapper, especially just starting out!
 
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